Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and codes of behavior. Do you agree or disagree?

These days, it seems that more
people
are migrating to other countries than ever before.
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question about the integration of newcomers into
society
.
Although
there are valid arguments to the contrary, in
this
paper I will argue that it is the responsibility of immigrants to adapt to accepted rules of
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in their adopted
country
, both written and unwritten. The reasons for
this
are twofold.
Firstly
, it is vitally important that newcomers observe the laws of their adopted
country
for the sake of social order. Imagine the chaos that would
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if
people
refused to drive on the same side of the road. It is,
therefore
, necessary for
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to ensure that they observe the law in their new
country
regardless of any differences to laws in their home
country
. Two
further
instances of practices which are permitted in some countries but prohibited in others are the possession of firearms and gambling.
Secondly
and more importantly, though, in order to maintain societal cohesion it is essential that newcomers respect the social norms of their adopted
country
. Of course, having a mixture of different cultures and traditions gives a
country
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and vibrancy;
however
, I would contend that too much cultural diversity undermines
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society
by alienating
people
from each other. It is my belief that similarities unite
people
,
whereas
differences have a tendency to divide. A strong
society
is a homogenous
society
with shared values and goals. By way of conclusion, I believe that
this
issue is likely to become even more important in the future as
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between countries
become
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increasingly blurred. It,
therefore
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further
consideration.
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