Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and codes of behavior. Do you agree or disagree?

These days, it seems that more people are migrating to other countries than ever before.
This
raise
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Raise
certain question
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certain questions
a certain question
the certain question
about the integration of newcomers into
society
.
Although
there are
valid
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Valid
arguments to the contrary, in
this
paper I will argue that it is the responsibility of
immigrants
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Immigrants
to adapt to accepted rules of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
in their adopted
country
, both written and
unwritten
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Unwritten
. The reasons for
this
are twofold.
Firstly
, it is vitally important that newcomers observe the laws of their adopted
country
for
the
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The
sake of social order. Imagine the chaos that would ensure if people refused to drive on the
same
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Same
side of the road. It is,
therefore
, necessary for all-immigrants to ensure that they observe
the
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The
law in their new
country regardless
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country, regardless
of any differences to laws in their home
country
. Two
further
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Further
instances of practices which are permitted in some
countries but
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countries, but
prohibited in others
are
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Are
the possession of firearms and gambling.
Secondly and
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Secondly, and
more importantly, though, in order to maintain societal cohesion it is essential
that
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That
newcomers respect the social norms of their adopted
country
. Of course, having a
mixture
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Mixture
of different cultures and traditions gives a
country
color
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
colour
and vibrancy;
however
, I
would
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Would
contend that too much cultural diversity undermines a
society
by alienating people
from
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From
each other. It is my belief that similarities unite people, whereas differences have a
tendency
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Tendency
to divide. A strong
society
is a homogenous
society
with shared values and goals. By way of conclusion, I believe that
this
issue is likely to become even more important in the
future
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Future
as border between countries become increasingly blurred. It,
therefore
, demands out
further
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Further
consideration.
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