Inspite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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agriculture

also

no longer remains out of the circle.Scientists have invented

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have invented a very

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ve invented latest technology that speeds up and save a lot of time for farmers. Despite all the facts we are very well aware of the ratio of starvation that has gradually been increasing across the globe.In

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essay I will discuss two key points , the global

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the process of becoming warmer; a rising temperature

warming

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tion which has detrimen

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industrialization, which

tal effects on

agriculture

. People's approach towards the environment have always been selfish.They have never paid attention to air pollution ,

land

pollut

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even nois

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pollution an

pollution a

the habitation of wild animals

den

dent

ollution.

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we are facing s

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nevitable issue like the gl

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serious and inevitable issues

a serious and inevitable issue

obal warming.It has affected environment a

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the environment

agriculture

with all worse possiblities.

a future prospect or potential

possibilities

For example

,Percentages

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f natural rain fall has

lowered

water falling in drops from vapor condensed in the atmosphere

rainfall

hich is alarming

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have lowered, which

have lowered which

for farmers.Morover ,

land

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water level

under the level of the ground

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farmers

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getting enough water

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core of agricultute.

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agriculture

Industrialization is a

second

major factor that has damaged

agriculture

in various ways.

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,it has made

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armful effects on soil and

thus

crop level has went down.

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government

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the land

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this

issue?

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of all ,

government

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ould encourage farmers by giving extra financial benefits and latest techno

logy.They should

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the latest technology

also

try to pursue more people to learn about

agriculture

by providing free courses and training.In additon ,

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the government

ual status to

agriculture

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government

by using water wisely ,and try to

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ast pollute air and soil.People and big supermarket owners must try not to waste food and make extra food reachable to poor people. To summerize ,we

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onment and lowered the waste of food.Modern time is bleesed with

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Inspite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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