Inspite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

The advances in technology have made the vast impact on every kind of field and of course
agriculture
also
no longer remains out of the circle.Scientists have invented
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have invented a very
very productive a
nd quality hybrid seeds , they even
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ha
ve invented latest technology that speeds up and save a lot of time for farmers. Despite all the facts we are very well aware of the ratio of starvation that has gradually been increasing across the globe.In
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essay I will discuss two key points , the global
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the process of becoming warmer; a rising temperature
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industrialization, which
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agriculture
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land
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pollution an
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serious and inevitable issues
a serious and inevitable issue
nevitable issue like the gl
obal warming.It has affected environment a
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the environment
nd
agriculture
with all worse possiblities.
a future prospect or potential
possibilities
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rainfall
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have lowered, which
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for farmers.Morover ,
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under the level of the ground
underground
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sult , famers are
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getting enough water
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core of agricultute.
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agriculture
Industrialization is a
second
major factor that has damaged
agriculture
in various ways.
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,it has made
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armful effects on soil and
thus
crop level has went down.
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government
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the government
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a backstage role
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backstage roles
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land
to business man
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businessman
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the land
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y the chemicals and the industries. How we can overcome
this
issue?
First
of all ,
government
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sh
ould encourage farmers by giving extra financial benefits and latest techno
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the latest technology
logy.They should
also
try to pursue more people to learn about
agriculture
by providing free courses and training.In additon ,
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the government
st give eq
ual status to
agriculture
and industrialization.People must support
government
by using water wisely ,and try to
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ast pollute air and soil.People and big supermarket owners must try not to waste food and make extra food reachable to poor people. To summerize ,we
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