Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientists?Do you agree or disagree?Support with reasons and examples from your own experience?

The whole world is driven by science
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A small handful of people
assume
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assumes
that entertainers are
valuable
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more valuable
than scientists,
however I
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however, I
trust in the power of science and
ability
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the ability
of the scientists to discover ways for betterment in health and innovations which support daily life for us to be able to appreciate and enjoy any entertainment around us. There are only a handful of
driven
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driving
people who want to make a difference in our lives by focusing on
paticular
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
particular
areas which need a fix like health and disease
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for example
: Alexander
flemming who
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Flemming, who
Flemming who
discoverd
discovered or determined by scientific observation
discovered
discover
discovers
the wonder drug penicillin
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something that has saved millions of lives till date.His contribution would not have been possible if the only emphasis around him was towards entertainment.
This
miracle treatment cannot be equated.
On the other hand
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other day- to- day activities like washing clothes or even ironing them have been made extremely simple with the help of new discoveries. Every avenue
such
as
trasportation
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
, food
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clothing
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housing
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media have been given a significant upgrade with great minds who invent.
For instance
, would be no telephone if not for Alexander graham bell! Mundane activities consume less time and
therefore
leave room for entertainers to make a living
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In
conclution
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
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my opinion with regards to scientists will hold good as they act as a fulcrum to enjoy any and all pleasures/
this
world and the entertainment industry has to offer
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