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Many people work from home using modern technology today. Some people think that only the workers benefit from this and not the employer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Due to
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 rapid advancement in technology, a large number of
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 are working from home these days. It is believed by some that
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 working arrangement would be detrimental to the organisations. In
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 essay, I will look into opposing views and draw my opinion on
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. Carrying out the tasks at home is considered to be advantageous solely for employees, but not for employers.
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 is because it could be seen as a less efficient way of working as the performance can not be effectively monitored by senior staff, some would not
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 reliably and some workers who have no
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 ethic could use
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 for their own benefit
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 of working diligently.
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, the
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 quality can be declined, if there is a lack of communication and understanding about the tasks.
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, many
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 providers prefer staff to
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 at the office for at least the first three months.
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, it could be a desirable arrangement from the employer's perspective that a perceived face-to-face working environment supports an efficient working environment and avoids insufficient communication and misunderstandings.
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, there are many
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 who support the working-from-home arrangement.
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, it is obvious that it helps to save time and money for
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 commuting to and from the workplace. Many have claimed that by completing tasks from their own places,
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 who have a family would have greater opportunities to contribute and dedicate more time to their loving family.
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, many researches have shown that because of enabled
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 and personal life balance,
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 satisfaction and performance by employers can be much improved and
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 providers
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 can be advatantegous by retaining more satisfied and efficient workers. In conclusion, both ways of working have pros for both employers and employees.
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, I opine that hybrid working would be the best way of working as
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 maintains both concern of the qualitative and effective working and well-being of staff.
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Try to reduce minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to make your essay even clearer.
task response
Consider providing more specific examples to strengthen your arguments about the benefits for employers and employees.
coherence cohesion
Ensure transitions between paragraphs are smooth and logical to maintain coherence.
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The introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively framed the discussion.
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The essay provides a balanced viewpoint and supports both perspectives well.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure and good organization of ideas throughout the essay.
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