CRIME RATE AMONG TEENAGERS HAS INCREASED DRAMMATICALLY

Crime
among the youth became a social problem over the
last
decade.
This
rate is increasing
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incredible
incredibly
day by day.
This
essay will touch the problems about the
crime
and some solutions
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on
of
it. There are a lot of
crime
reasons as poverty, peer pressure, unfair judicial system, family conditions, drug addiction, politics, religion, racism, deprivation, society, unemployment, etc. But generally we can separate it into two common: material and spiritual. Spiritual reasons should be called
such
as psychological, biological, material reasons are connected with financial problems. I would like to mention
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the details
details
.
First
of all, ignorance, poor educational backgrounds stands behind one of the main reasons of
crime
. It is not the mere reason of homicide. As a psychological cause, I can mention anger, greed, low self-esteem, neglect of families
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with
to
their children, etc. Even
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more crucial
the most crucial
and widespread reason is drug and alcohol abuse. And of
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course, this
course
this
reason stands to psychological causes, too. Material reasons exist, too. As far as I know financial problems trigger off the
crime
. The most common is unemployment. People can’t gain, they are not able to get succeed what they want and it brings greed and envy the people around them and the
last
,
crime
is committed. There are some ways of solution to avoid the youth from the
crime
.
First
of all, the parents should be attentive about their children to avoid the
crime
. It should be begun to prepare them from childhood. The families must not deprive of their children from love and attention. They must get good educational skills, especially social sciences. The government should do a lot of things about avoiding from
crime
as to reduce the unemployment or to get the severest laws against the drug trade and the severest punishment for that. In conclusion, it is crucial to stay away from
crime
. The world is completely blind in separating needs from desires. Even if you have less money for survival, you must be happy with it
instead
of willing to contour yourself in the pool of
crime

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