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You are studying at a college which has very limited sports and leisure facilities for students. Write a letter to the principal. In your letter, outline the situation propose ways to improve this situation request a meeting to discuss this Begin your letter ‘Dear --------’ Do not write any addresses Write at least 150 words

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Dear Mr Smith, I thought you might be interested in some thoughts associated with the amenities for exercise and free time activities at university.
Although
 there
are
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is
 a tennis court as well as a small cafeteria at
college campus
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college campuses
a college campus
the college campus
, they are not as adequate as you might think. I suppose it would be better if you could provide students with more recreational facilities, since it can create a vibrant environment at university Here are some suggestions, and I hope you find them effective. It might be a good idea if you could turn the vacant lot at the north
port
something determined in relation to something that includes it
part
 of the university into a multi-sport outdoor facility, and students with any sport backgrounds can benefit from it hugely. I
also
 recommend to renovate the old auditorium since
its
the thing named or in question
it
 has fallen into disrepair for many years, and it can be greatly beneficial as a multipurpose hall. I guess it
could to be
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could be
 helpful if we could meet in person to discuss
this
 proposal in details, and I would greatly appreciate
this
 opportunity. I hope it will be acceptable if I contact your office assistant to arrange a convenient time. Thank you for your time and consideration. Kind Regards, Javad Karimi
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