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Now the machine is very complex, and a lot of difficult work is automated. Does this machine automation have more pros than cons?

#machine #work #automation
Machines in today's world are complex in terms of structure or its working. The
intrduction
formally making a person known to another or to the public
introduction
 of
automation
 of daily works through machine has both advantages and disadvantages.In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is more of a disadvantage because despite it has the power of getting complex
work
 done easily using machines (
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.
e
Suggestion
E
automation
) it can
also
 be noteworthy that it can bring down the need of
man power
the force of workers available
manpower
 that are required in getting those jobs done. Machines in today's world are a boon to mankind. It has brought down the burden on a
man
 immensely in recent years and have often proved to be the efficient ways of getting a
work
 done in recent time. It saves a lot of time and is less error prone when
compared
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comparable
comparative
 manual
work
.
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.
Automation
 is the way of getting a job done when it comes to IT field because the amount of
work
 it can do is way more than a manual
work
 which is beneficial for a
comapny
an institution created to conduct business
company
.
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.
 So
this
 is the way in which the IT companies have grown over the years
from
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since
 moving manual works to
automation
. While the
automation
 has many advantages
,
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,
 it
also
 has several disadvantages as well. The amount of
man power
the force of workers available
manpower
 required is significantly less when
automation
 takes over a task getting done
.
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.
There will be a set back in the number of manpower that was required when no
automation
 was present.
This
 creates a lot of unemployment.Often a
man
 now gets to compete with
machines where in
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machines, wherein
machines wherein
 he stands no where close to what a machine can do. There might be
a day where in
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a day where
 the whole mankind would be replaced by
automation
 of machines
.
Accept space
.
 The invention of machines and automating have a great advantages in many
aspects but
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aspects, but
 it is never the solution which can be accepted in
long term
Suggestion
the long term
 because it comes with several disadvantages too. So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to conclude that the extent of disadvantage will be more than the advantages that the
automation
 brings to the world.

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