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The chart below show the result of a survey of adult education. The fist chart shows the reasons why adult decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information show below.

The chart below show the result of a survey of adult education. The fist chart shows the reasons why adult decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information show below.
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According to
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 a recent survey of adult education, there are seven reasons
about
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why adults decide to study, where “interest in
subject
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” is the option that
have
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 more answers with 40%.
This
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explain
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 that
brain
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the brain
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 always
want
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 new knowledge. The
next
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 three options
are involve
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with
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reasons like
improve
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 their performance in the work,
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due to
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we can find: to gain qualifications with 38%, helpful for
current
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 job with 22%,
improve
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 prospects of promotion with 20%. Indeed, people
is
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interesting
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 in
have
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 better skills for
do
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a
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 best work.
In
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 the other hand, we can find reasons more different like
enjoy
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enjoying
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learn
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learning
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/
stuying
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studying
staying
 with 20%, to able to change Jobs with 12%, and the
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 option “to meet people” with 9%.
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, the survey
including
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other topic
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another topic
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 about how the cost of each course should be shared, where
the
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most people think that
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 must be
ndividual
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individual
individuals
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a
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40%.
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, is the option employer with 35% and taxpayer with 25%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "improve" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • respondents
  • motivation
  • percentage
  • cost distribution
  • financial responsibility
  • education funding
  • pie chart
  • bar chart
  • data
  • subsidize
  • self-improvement
  • career advancement
  • personal interest
  • allocate
  • tuition
  • public funding
  • private investment
  • retraining
  • lifelong learning
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