There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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you question to me

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you question me

“what

cannot you live

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you cannot live

with?”

possibility

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Possibility

I answer you with

music

, because I think

that is

the best company for any person in the world. The

music

serve

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serves

for

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share, dance and sing. When we heard

music

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the music

change our emotions and mood, we can be happy or sad, but

the true

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the truth

is that

this

kind of art is not

indiference

marked by a lack of interest

indifferent

for

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anyone. So for

this

listen

music

is very

neccesary

absolutely essential

necessary

unnecessary

. In the world exist a lot of

sort of

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sorts, of

sorts of

music

: rock, pop, country,

regueaton

the act of rejecting something

rejection

, but there are bands more popular than

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

one. The consequence of

that is

not good, because the people lost their identity, because they don’t

heard

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hear

music

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the music

of their country. The identity is what

define

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defines

a place, if we don’t have

identity

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an identity

, we

don’t exists

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don’t exist

haven’t existed

. So it

is necessary keep

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is necessary, keeping

is necessary keeping

the traditions, or we will not be nothing. In the

last

time in Chile, there is a law that demand

put

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puts

porcent

a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)

percent

of national

music

in the radio. I think that idea is good, because we are doing strong our local

music

for new generations. As well the people can find international

music

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the internet or other places,

this

law is the begin of the love our traditions.

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emotional release
cultural significance
globalization
cultural exchange
technology
preservation
cultural heritage
social cohesion
expression
consumption
production
traditional music
international music
diversity
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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to the advanced technology which can prevent and solve the crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Today children are surrounded by electronic devices such as personal computers, tablet computers, and smart phones, and they learn to use them at a very early age. What are advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

Some people believe that too much attention and too many sources are given to the protection of wild animals and wild birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?