There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

If
you question to me
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you question me
“what
cannot you live
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you cannot live
with?”
possibility
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Possibility
I answer you with
music
, because I think
that is
the best company for any person in the world. The
music
serve
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serves
for
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to
share, dance and sing. When we heard
music
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the music
change our emotions and mood, we can be happy or sad, but
the true
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the truth
is that
this
kind of art is not
indiference
marked by a lack of interest
indifferent
for
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to
anyone. So for
this
listen
music
is very
neccesary
absolutely essential
necessary
unnecessary
. In the world exist a lot of
sort of
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sorts, of
sorts of
music
: rock, pop, country,
regueaton
the act of rejecting something
rejection
, but there are bands more popular than
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
one. The consequence of
that is
not good, because the people lost their identity, because they don’t
heard
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hear
music
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the music
of their country. The identity is what
define
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defines
a place, if we don’t have
identity
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an identity
, we
don’t exists
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don’t exist
haven’t existed
. So it
is necessary keep
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is necessary, keeping
is necessary keeping
the traditions, or we will not be nothing. In the
last
time in Chile, there is a law that demand
put
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puts
a
porcent
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percent
of national
music
in the radio. I think that idea is good, because we are doing strong our local
music
for new generations. As well the people can find international
music
in
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on
the internet or other places,
this
law is the begin of the love our traditions.
Submitted by rominahuaiquil on

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