There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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you question to me

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you question me

“what

cannot you live

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you cannot live

with?”

possibility

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Possibility

I answer you with

music

, because I think

that is

the best company for any person in the world. The

music

serve

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serves

for

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share, dance and sing. When we heard

music

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the music

change our emotions and mood, we can be happy or sad, but

the true

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the truth

is that

this

kind of art is not

indiference

marked by a lack of interest

indifferent

for

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anyone. So for

this

listen

music

is very

neccesary

absolutely essential

necessary

unnecessary

. In the world exist a lot of

sort of

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sorts, of

sorts of

music

: rock, pop, country,

regueaton

the act of rejecting something

rejection

, but there are bands more popular than

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

one. The consequence of

that is

not good, because the people lost their identity, because they don’t

heard

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hear

music

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the music

of their country. The identity is what

define

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defines

a place, if we don’t have

identity

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an identity

, we

don’t exists

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don’t exist

haven’t existed

. So it

is necessary keep

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is necessary, keeping

is necessary keeping

the traditions, or we will not be nothing. In the

last

time in Chile, there is a law that demand

put

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puts

porcent

a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)

percent

of national

music

in the radio. I think that idea is good, because we are doing strong our local

music

for new generations. As well the people can find international

music

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the internet or other places,

this

law is the begin of the love our traditions.

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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

Fully explain your ideas

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