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An Increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online

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The statistics of individuals purchasing things online
is raising
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are raising
 rapidly. Internet shopping has its own benefits and as all the things in the world, there are certain drawbacks to
this
 mode of purchasing too. One of the plus points of buying things on
internet
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the internet
 is the comfortability. Humans are increasingly becoming more congenial towards electronic purchasing of the items they require,
this
 is the result of ease of access of these websites anywhere. Men and women can order anything they want by just laying in the bed at 2 am in
morning
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the morning
 or being at work and getting bored. Another reason why they are flocking towards online shopping is because of the comparison, technological advancements
has caused
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have caused
 all the major brands to develop a website offering their customers the lowest rates as compared to their competitors. Due to
this
, consumers can differentiate the rates of the same product offered by different companies and can easily make an informed decision. As it is said, every coin has two sides. If there are pros, there are always cons to
this
 mode of purchasing things. The biggest problem with buying clothes online is the dilemma of whether the item will fit human being, the sizes shown on the websites are designed in
such
 a way that a person matching the same measurements will be able to wear it. Another negative side is the local community stores are closing and people running the business
from
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for
 a long time must witness
fewer
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littles
 to less people coming
in
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into
 their shops to buy necessary things. In conclusion, while there are numerous positive effects of obtaining anything online, there are similar negative points that do not directly affect the consumer but does affect local shops. People’s comfort is important, but so is the business for shop owners.

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