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Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad.To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

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Nowadays, more and more students are choosing to study in foreign countries. While
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 tendency is undoubtedly beneficial, some drawbacks should certainly be taken into consideration. On the one hand, studying overseas is advantageous to a certain extent.
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, studying abroad means that students are exposed to greater diversity as regards knowledge,
culture
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 and the standards of living,
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, they may graduate with a
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strong
 cultural asset and be more marketable.
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, they are bound to have a decent job with a lucrative income.
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, studying abroad is a golden opportunity that enables students to broaden their horizons as they experience a brand-new country with incredible new outlooks, customs, and activities.
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, when moving to other countries, students naturally become the cultural ambassador, and help to promote their local
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 to many other parts of the world.
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, there are some potential difficulties facing students as well as their countries of origin.
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 with, when entering a
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 different from their own, a newcomer is prone to
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 shock, and the sense of homesickness, depression and isolation are inevitable.
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, the cost of living abroad is
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expensive, so
 that many students exhaust themselves doing part-time jobs to cover these costs, which might have an adverse impact on their academic results and physical well-being as well. More importantly, a sad truth is that brain drain happens when many talented students leave their country and settle down abroad, causing
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major losses
a major loss
 to their country's human capital. In conclusion, despite the possible drawbacks of studying abroad, it is obviously a great opportunity that every student should seize for a better future.

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