These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

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It is true that there has been an increasing number of female Breadmakers appears in the society leaves their male partner to raise their kids. I think fathers have their right to choose to stay

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and raise their kids. On the one hand, I agree that fathers stay at

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and babysitting their kids can bring two detrimental effects. We cannot deny the existence of stereotypes that men should be the ones to support their family or others may think less of you.

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, there are so many Hollywood movies are telling about the story that the main actors get dumped due to their lack of abilities to make money.

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, women are more suitable for taking care of kids due to their maternal instinct. Men are generally lacking of patience, especially on babysitting compare to women, which can lead to the depression of kids.

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, I argue that men should have the right to choose what they want to do, either staying at

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or working outside. Even though people have been talking about gender equalities and women’s empowerment for years, few people can embrace

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idea in their deepest hearts. In

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case, we are not discussing about whether fathers should stay at

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or not; we are talking about if we can accept the idea that women are dominant in their families comparing to men. Since the 20th century, there are more and more women in power, and they are doing a good job in general which can prove that women should have equal opportunities with men.

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, men have their birthright to choose their life path which shows the progress of society.

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believe the benefits brought by fathers stay at

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and babysit their children overweight the disadvantages.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

breadwinner
caregiving
paternal leave
societal perceptions
gender roles
flexible working conditions
personal preference
father-child relationship
emotional and social development
household responsibilities
career opportunities
professional achievements
balanced parenting
earning potential
social stigma
societal pressure
discrimination
traditional mindsets
resentment
adjustment

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These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

All over the world , the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer, What problem does this cause? How can we oversome the problems of poverty.

Nowadays there is an increase in social problems involving young people because more parents spent time at work than with their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You recently completed a course and youu borrowed a book from your teacher which you couldn't return in time. You would like to return the book now. Write a letter to your teacher and say: What book it was. How helpful was the book? Explain why you couldn't return it in time.

Trade and travel would be a lot easier with a single, global currency that we all use. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?