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Some people believe that television programmes are of no real value for children.How far do you agree or disagree?

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Television is one of the wonderful discovery which brings the images into motion and soundtrack
thus
 giving altogether a different perspective to visual experience. It's often a debate about its worth for the children with critics highlighting the negative shades. I strongly believe that it helps in the moulding the social, personal and intellectual capabilities of younger children.
Firstly
, the educational theme based series not only teaches them the concepts, but
also
 gives the young minds the reasoning
thus
 inculcating a strong logical bend of mind which enhances their analytical power and make them a better at judgement.
Secondly
, the current affairs programs not only help them to be updated on the latest information but
also
 shaping up their all-round personality by understanding the viewpoint of the world leaders and their personal traits.
Finally
, it helps them to develop the spirit of healthy competition and co-operation after watching the team games where they see legends supporting their team to win the games and
also
 accepting the result of match gracefully be it a win or loss. In a nutsh
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, i feel that television programmes can leave an everlasting imprint on the children to be a bette
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