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Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Dear Mr.Bezos, I
am writing
Suggestion
was writing
 with regards to the Internal Job Positions opportunities listed in yesterday's mail from the Human Resource
team
.
Firstly
, it has been a great privilege to be a part of
this
 esteemed organisation, for five years. I was looking out for a transfer since
last
 six months, and I found that there is a suitable opportunity, for my profile in the Risk Management
team
 in the Canada. I request you to help me take my profile forward, by providing your valuable reference. It is due to the great learning that I accumulated while working with
this
team
, I am a competent candidate to apply for
this
 post. It has been a great journey so far and I feel grateful for the same as I am capable of handling a
team
 of 20 members since
last
 2 years.
However
, I believe that there is a lot of scope to learn new things different from what I currently do.
Hence
, I am looking forward to pursuing my
next
 level professional growth. The reason why I feel my candidature is suitable for
this
 opportunity is because I can apply my analytical skills that I learnt in the current
team
 and help mitigate risk in the pilot
team
 of Risk Management department.
Also
, it is a platform for me to enhance and demonstrate my machine learning skills. Hope you find
this
 request, a reasonable one. I look forward to hearing a positive response from you. Yours sincerely, Kavitha
Submitted by Kavitha on

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