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Some people think that scientists experimenting with animal in a laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for Human's life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Experimenting on animals is a conventional
way
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 with the aim of to assuring about product's
safety
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 in most of the industries. So far it has been very helpful in science's development. It may be
only
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the only way
way
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 that
help
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helps
 to
assuring
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assure
 about some important product
safety
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.
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dealth
act on verbally or in some form of artistic expression
dealt
deals
death
 with some of opinions for and against
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 matter. Proponents claim that there is not the other
way
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 that can be useful for product testing as well as experimenting on animals and
this
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 method is the only
way
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 which we can
use
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 to assure about
products
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product
product's
products'
safety
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 which had a minimum error so far. Especially in
human's
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human
 health issues
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 as
drugs
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drug
 industry using animals have been the best
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from
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for
 many
last
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 years to now and scholars believe that
animals
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animal's
animals'
 body
reaction
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reacted
reacts
reacting
react
 after experiment
helpes
give help or assistance; be of service
helps
helped
 them to aware from products side effects. Beside
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, they
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 believe that
human's life
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a human's life
 is far more important than animals.
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,
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 method led to many
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concerns
 regarding about
animals
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the animals' safety
animals' safety
animal safety
animal's safety
safety
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. Critics believe that because animals are alive, definitely they suffer from these kind of experiments and we have no right to endanger the life of animals and these experiments should be stoped.
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 experimenting on animals
may be have
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may have
 not exact results and
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finally don't
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finally, don't
 be trusted, so if scientists
use
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 these results for produce new products may be caused serious problems.
in
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In
 conclusion humans and animals life is important.
it
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It
 is not easy to decide about any of
them but
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them, but
 in my
opinion there
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opinion, there
 is no need to
use
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 animals for testing all
kind
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kinds
 of products and we can
use
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 those just for essential products
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 as drugs that have many serious impacts on human health.
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