Nowadays, the mobile phone plays a major role in our lives, which brings many benefits to us but also contains some drawbacks. Both these sides will discussed in this essay.

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Generally, the mobile
phone
will certainly bring about a lot of advantages.
First
of all, the mobile
phone
is considered the quickest means of communication in our daily life, we can contact easily with our friends and our relative wherever by calling or sending messages.
Second
, the mobile
phone
is
also
a means of entertainment for people. We can listen to music and play games on mobile
phone
.
Moreover
, by using the latest apps for smartphones
,
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,
we can access to the internet to watch Film and check our profile in social networks and update our status wherever we are.
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Finally
, If we have a smartphone in hand,
our
introduces an alternative
or
studying becomes more effective
such
as look up
dictionary
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the dictionary
a dictionary
, find out many
source
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sources
of reference on
internet
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the internet
which is useful for studying.
On the other hand
, the mobile
phone
is
also
many
disadvantage
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disadvantages
.
First
, telephone user become
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
addicted their mobile
phone
if they are too depends on it,
moreover
, the ability of human communication is limited if the mobile
phone
is more present in some event
such
as class meetings, on the bus, in the park
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some people only focus on their
phone
without communicating. The use of mobile phones too much will make people take a lot of time
,
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,
it
it is
it's
not only influence
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not only influencing
on study results, makes
students
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student
distraction but
also
it is
cause
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the cause
a cause
of disease about eyes.
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Finally
, we shouldn't use
mobile
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a mobile phone
phone
while we are driving because it can lead traffic accidents. In conclusion,
mobile
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the mobile phone
phone
is necessary for our modern lives today.
However it
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However, it
is helpful or not
,
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,
which depends on our ways of using it. It will be better if we use it true purpose and
in
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at
an appropriate time.
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