children nowadays spend great deal of time watching television.However television cannot replace as learning tool which is why children are less educated today.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Television
is an inseparable thing for the new generation
today
. The advancement in the
television
industry has changed the way man lives
today
by bringing
him every
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him, every
event
that is
happening around the world and providing all kinds of entertainment to watch from home. For better or worse people are addicted to
television
programs and spend a great deal of
time
watching it. The impact of
television
on children is a matter of worry for many, especially for parents, as children are the most passionate about televisions
today
. Unlike a generation ago, where children were spending their
time
reading books or doing outdoor activities that help them in their personal, intellectual and physical development,
today
's children are more preferred to sit at home and relax watching their favourite
television
channel will definitely have an advert impact on their development.
Television
can bring in educational programs for
children but
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children, but
it cannot replace the
tradition
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traditional
way of studying from books! Books are subject specific and have a great amount of well-focused information for children to study. Apart from teaching specific subjects, it
also
helps children to learn to read, write and make decisions.
On the other hand
,
television
programmes to teach the same subject will not bring in these benefits and make the children a lazy learner.
Moreover
, children are not keen to watch
such
educational programs. They are more interested in watching sports, movies and cartoons which may not have educational concepts but more of an entertainment
factors
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factor
. Obviously, the more
time
children spend on
television
is the
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is, the
less
time
they get for studying from books and
thus
impact the quality of their education.
This
would remain as a challenge for
today
's parents, teachers and society.

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