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Earlier People wore clothes which were related to their culture. But now, people wear same type of all over the world. Is this a positive development or a negative development?

Wearing clothes is an essential requirement in a civilize society. It is subjected with the evolution of apes. Even though the people who lived in the past wore clothes which were related to their
culture
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, people in the modern world do not consider much concern on
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 aspect. It seems to be a negative aspect than a positive development. What is meant by a
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? Difference between languages, wearing clothes, social events as well as the spiritual beliefs of one group from another is called
culture
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. Each and every ethnic groups have their own cultural identities. Though many factors are involved with
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, cloth is the graphical illustration of a
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 because there is no any other factor can visualize the cultural difference at once. As an example: nobody can identify an Indian and a Sri Lankan by sight unless they revealed their real identity. But, with their national suits everybody can recognize who they are. It is the uniqueness of a cultural dress. Cultural textiles are always designed according to the climate factor of the country. There are mainly three climate zones in the world called tropical, Temperate and polar zone. Fabrics and styles are manufactured and designed according to the climate condition of that particular region. The clothes which are used in the winter season in
United Kingdom
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the United Kingdom
, do not suitable for the
summer time
the warmest season of the year; in the northern hemisphere it extends from the summer solstice to the autumnal equinox
summertime
 in Sri Lanka. It is very important to
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identify
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 difference without working blindly. When we consider the above discussed reasons, it is very clear that wearing the same types of clothes all over the world which is not impress the cultural values is a negative development. Because it destroys the uniqueness of ethnicity by leading and pushing
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 towards the European identity.

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