Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Although
there is no doubt that crime must be punished, it is important to consider which type of
penal
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the penal system
system
is most appropriate. While some believe that a
system
of fixed sentences should be adopted, I support the view that punishments should be based on motives and circumstances. Those who advocate implementing a judicial process of set punishments may argue that
this
would make criminal trials
more efficient
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more efficiently
.
For example
, once a jury has decided a particular defendant is guilty of murder, the judge need only refer to the ‘punishment for murder’ to
sentence
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the sentence
that person to life imprisonment. The benefit of
this
is that a huge amount of time would be saved in court,
thus
leading to significant financial savings.
As a result
, more money could be spent on healthcare, education and welfare.
However
, I would argue that the above
system
is too rigid, and a process of ‘flexible’ punishments is much fairer. The latter punishment
system
, which many countries use, leaves more room for compassion toward offenders who have been blackmailed or manipulated.
For instance
, under
this
system
, if a thief is able to prove that he had been bullied into committing his crime, he should be sentenced to less prison time than a thief who had been motivated by greed. If,
instead
, fixed punishments were implemented,
this
sense of fairness and morality would be lost. In conclusion, while a legal
system
of fixed punishments might be more cost-effective and efficient, a procedure of assessing crimes based on circumstances and motives
is
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has been
more just, and justice, in my view, is paramount.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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