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In developing nations, there is an increase in international tourism. Is this more advantageous or disadvantageous?

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Visiting global destinations for vacations has become a fashion in the recent times. Tourists are especially opting to visit advancing economies. I perceive that
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 the foremost one is the upsurge in the revenue for the host nation. As large numbers of visitors arrive, they spend a considerable amount of money on accommodation, travel, leisure activities and shopping which not only increases the foreign exchange for the country but
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 results in gain for various businesses. For India, a significant amount of GDP growth is due to tourism.
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 the locals get employment. As there are numerous job opportunities in the hospitality sector, being a guide, driver or working in hotels is possible in places where tourists flock.
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 the visitors are able to gain a lot of insights about their place of visit. They get a sense of the local culture in terms of clothes, food, customs and language which puts the place on the world map.
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 there are a few drawbacks of
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 with, the environment of the area may face degradation. To exemplify, pollution in air and water may disrupt the local flora and fauna.
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 the visitors may indulge in some activities that may offend the natives or hurt their sentiments. To encapsulate, tourism is now quite essential for a nation’s progress. Economical development and global cultural exchange clearly outweigh the negatives of tourism.
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