You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do

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Dear

Mr.

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Ali,

This

is Lama, I am a student doing Business English and I got an acceptance in the National Bank to do my summer training programme as planned for

this

course,

however

this

requirement was cancelled recently and

that is

why I am writing

this

letter.

First

, I need to ask for your support regarding my problem.I will try to explain it briefly to avoid wasting your time.

Second

, I started

since

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2017 when the training course was a must for graduation and I had to look for a place to accept me as a trainer,

however

, I was informed that

this

is no longer a requirement.

Furthermore

, I made all my arrangements in order to travel to Dubai and do my work programme.

Third

, I would request your help in considering

this

summer programme as a graded course, because the company in Dubai will send you directly my evaluation form including my progress tracking.

Finally

, I will be waiting for your response as soon as possible.Thanks for your time and effort in advance. Yours sincerely, Lama Jaljouli

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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thirdly
in additional
moreover
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for example
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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

178 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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