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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The government face difficult problems in order to increase peoples health care system due to the increasing amount of obese citizens. It is considered by some that introducing and encouraging students to participate in physical
school
 activities are the key to solve the growing number of population on obesity. In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
 statement about how well educated students in physical education could prevent obesity in the future.
First
 of all, there are a lot of people who highly motivated into sports, but still are unable to play those sports.
In other words
, these people are not taught properly back when they were still in
school
.
For example
, a lot of my colleagues feel so much enthusiasm in badminton.
However
, around 90 percent of those friends of mine are unable to play badminton.
Consequently
, they start losing the motivation to play and choose to just enjoy watching the games on TV.
Thus
, due to the lack of ability to play sports, people will start losing motivation and begin to gain a lot of weight for not doing any sports at all.
Secondly
, these days,
school
 curriculum only focuses on learning in class lessons,
such
 as math, science, biology, etc., and reduce the amount of time for outside activities.
As a result
, students will feel exhausted because of the long duration in a class study process and eventually feel discouraged to play outside. They rather choose to rest at home than doing outdoor activities. That's why, government need to adjust some rules about
school
 curriculum for students to balance the outdoor and indoor activity. In conclusion, physical education lessons are critical in reducing the growth of overweight people because it will not only enable highly enthusiastic people to play but
also
 improving youngsters physical body.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity rates
  • health care system
  • physical education
  • instill
  • long term
  • raise awareness
  • healthier lifestyle choices
  • nutritional education
  • active transport
  • quality of instruction
  • facilities and equipment
  • diet control initiatives
  • community sports programs
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