Some people think that children should be punished when they commit a crime. Some others think that their parents should be punished. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
contemporary epoch
,
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,
crime
increases gradually.Some people believe that
pupil
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pupils
the pupil
a pupil
should be punished for
commiting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
a
crime
,
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,
whereas other contends believe that guardian are responsible
,
Accept space
,
so the punishment is given to them.
However
, in my opinion parents should have to be understood the child.I will discuss my both views below in my stance. There are multiple reasons as to why some tots commit a
crime
.
To begin
with
,
Accept space
,
most of the children feel insecurity and trust issues
among
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between
their parents, so teenagers hide emotions and express their anger through
crime
.
Secondaly
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Secondly
, the
movies plays
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movies, play
movies play
an
indispensible
not to be dispensed with; essential
indispensable
role in the
commitment
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commission
of
crime
.
Furthermore
, children adapt the style of reel model in their real life and do crimes.To
illustrates
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illustrate
, as per the survey of
Times
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the Times
of
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
depicts that 80% of children watch the action movies.
Thus
, they believe the world is
undercontrol
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under control
, if they commit a
crime
or the name and fame is
maintain
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maintained
.
On the contrary
side, parents
plays
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play
most significant role
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a more significant role
more significant role
in children's life.Due to the time constraints
,
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,
parents busy in their hectic schedule
also
sometimes ignore the children misbehave.
Additionally
, lack of bonding with children paves out into
allow
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allowing
the tots to show their negative impact on others.
For instance
, in
this
scenario parents are busy in the workplace and ignore the childcare.
Consequently
, children free to do their actions in the way of
crime
or
harrashment
a feeling of intense annoyance caused by being tormented
harassment
also
. To wrap up,
although
children commit
crime
, but parents have to
understood
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understand
them.
However
, in my opinion parents love and care towards pupil
dimnish
decrease in size, extent, or range
diminish
the commitment of
crime
Suggestion
a crime
crimes
the crime
.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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