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Q some people believe that if is best to accept a bad situation. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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From my perspectives, people who think wisely they take all opportunities to improve bad conditions
such
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 as lack of money and unsatisfactory
job
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 duties.
However
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, there are many people who believe not to take any risk because of fear of loosing that much amount of money too.
This
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 kind of thinkers
believe
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believes
 in sticking at
the bad
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the worst
 situations till they get new experience which could be capable of improving the most personal skills and confidence to get by undergoing bad situations.
This
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 essay will look at both aspects of
argue
Suggestion
arguing
 and will reach to the best conclusion. To talk about accepting bad situation, most of people are wasting their skills and time by not going against the pressurised work polices. For an instance, if an employee has been working for an organization from
last
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 5 years and still he is not getting all benefits of health and vacation pay, he is wasting
his all skills
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all his skills
 and endeavours by waiting.
Moreover
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, if he tries to get at
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 agency he can surely get with all benefits and more worthy
job
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 for him.
On the other hand
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, all people are not brave enough to take the decisions quickly as they might can have responsibilities of their families and afraid
from
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of
 not getting
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
job
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 as soon as possible. They still believe in fate and prefer to go with the flow by accepting the current situations. Fear is the main lesion of not going to change the
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 other than
low confidence
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the low confidence
 which is enough obvious since
this
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 era is of global competition. If one employee
leave
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leaves
 the
job
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 there are numerous options available to the organization for recruitment. I pen down here by stating that people should go
with
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to
 change to accept challenges if they want to grow in
this
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 fast pace of
environment
Suggestion
the environment
, but at the same time they
also
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 should take decision wisely and according to the situation.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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