Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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Kid’s are playing with plethora toys provided by some parents

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I will share both positive and negative

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impacts

on their kid’s life in my essay. To discuss on the positive side

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, some parents are busy

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their daily routine.

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they are not able to spend much time with their child’s

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they provide

lot

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lots

of toys to their kid’s so that kid’s can engage with toy’s.

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children can learn faster about many things about their outer world by exploring toy’s themselves.

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kid’s can learn faster

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an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries

English

alphabetical

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word’s and how to pronounce each word’s. In

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a recent survey

the recent survey

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according to the "Times of India” new’s

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80% of child’s are fast learner and have demonstrated much creativity during their early age. To discuss

on the other hand

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the negative side

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there are many negative

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impacts

on children

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fatter

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parents are the

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teacher for their kid’s.

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parent’s tend to not

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spend

much time with them due to their busy life.

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kid’s do not learn about the social aspect which is very critical component to learn for their feature.

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they are having much

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to understand

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understanding

how to collaborate with other friend’s.

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I have seen many kid’s do not share or play with others

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This

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reflects

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the negative impact

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on their social

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

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. To recapitulate, parent’s provides many toy’s to their

children which

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children, which

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impact

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impacts

. I would strongly suggest, as a parent

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we need to be mindful to ensure a balance when to provide toy’s and when to spend time with them

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

257 words

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