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The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognised as increasing numbers of species come under threat. what can be done to maintain biodiversity?

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Protection of Flora and fauna are of utmost importance now because of the dramatic rise in the lives of nature.
there
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There
 are many factors which are responsible for
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 cause. In the forthcoming paragraphs, the reasons and prevention measures will be discussed.
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There
 is no doubt that industries fumes and disposed waste in water have caused the ecosystem imbalance, In
past few years
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the past few years
,
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the surge
a surge
 in
global warming level
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the global warming level
 and afforestation have made the survival of ocean and land life difficult,
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, harming the vegetation, aquatic as well as terrestrial animals.
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, if pollution level was curbed long ago, dodo bird would not have gone extinct. Plastic bags thrown in the ocean are lethal and has killed innumerable fishes and other water life. Most of the human beings are indifferent towards the damaging effects on earth these uncivilised ways are doing. In order to safeguard plants and the endangered species who are vulnerable, strict measures should be taken. Like, felling of trees should be reduced,
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 to that people should be educated on the importance of tree plantation. All the factories can be moved far away from the areas where mother nature is not afflicted.
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, a law was passed in
few countries
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a few countries
 to move the manufacturing units to keep the sea life and unmitigated penalty was levied on those who flout the rules and regulations.
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result drastic
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result, drastic
 improvement was noticed, saved
river
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the river
 from contamination. To conclude, maintenance of ecological balance is crucial to our planet.
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 it seems inevitable to completely eradicate the root cause of
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 problem,
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, its detrimental Impact can surely be subdued by joint endeavours.
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