It is inevitable that as technology develops so traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible - you cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree with this view?

some
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Some
are of the opinion that
advent
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the advent
of technology can put an end to cultural values and it is unavoidable to have technology and customs go hand in hand. I partially agree with the statement because advancement in technology has definitely brought changes in the way of
living but
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living, but
earlier ways are alive and respect towards it is still intact.
This
essay will be analysed with supporting examples. Smartphones and computer systems have certainly taken a higher place in today's era.
it
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It
is undeniable that scientific developments have surrounded us and mankind's inclination towards the gadgets have been rapidly growing.
most
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Most
of the generation
have started
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has started
to blindly follow the trends proliferating on social media and emulate their idol's lifestyle which sometimes go against the conventional ways.
For example
, in the past predominantly people in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
disdained love marriages and was an unacceptable practice in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
but now it is socially accepted.
many
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Many
of the countries adopt the belief and ideas, which were originated in some other foreigner
land but
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land, but
it doesn't supersede the moral and ethics of their country.
For
instance due
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instance, due
to westernization, many of the women as well as men quit the archaic style of dressing up,
however
, their outer appearance did not alter the fact that ancestral methods are still preserved and not forgotten. To conclude that though emergence modern science and lifestyle exhibit drastic
changes but
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changes, but
our customs are not faded away either. Both of these
way
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ways
of living is peacefully implemented without sabotaging the society.

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