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The chart below shows the proportions of the world’s oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of the world’s oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts
shows
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 the
oil
resources
 held,
together with
 the proportions consumed within the same area each year, in different areas of the
world
. It is obvious that the region holding the most
oil
resources
 is the Middle East, with 56.52%, over
a
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half of
total
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the total
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world
oil
resources
while
 in the United States and Asia, the level of
oil
 consumed each year is
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more away from the
oil
resources
 they hold. The percentage of total
world
oil
 consumption of
United
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 States and Asia
are
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 25.48% and 26.21% respectively. They are the highest
oil
 consumption region in the
world
. Another place
that is
 worth
mentioned
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 will be
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Western Europe. With about twenty
percent
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 of total
world
oil
 consumption,
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Western Europe merely holds less than 1.5% of the
oil
resources
 in the
World
. Regions that are not mentioned above have the close percentage between
oil
 holding and
consuming
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consumption
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whereas
 Canada has the highest level of
oil
 holding than consuming, the respective figures are 14.84% and 2.48%.
Overall
, the charts suggest that
Middle
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the Middle
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 East is the only majority at
oil
resources
 held,
while
 Asia,
United
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the United
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 States and western have the highest level
at
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of
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oil
resources
 imported.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, resources, world with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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