Write about the following topic: Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Although
some people think that for
development
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the development
of
children educating
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children, educating
them at
home
is
best way
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the best way
,
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,
others hold
a
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an
opinion that
school
plays
more significant role
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a more significant role
in their education.Undoubtedly, both approaches have their own advantages.
However
,
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,
I believe
study
at
school
is more beneficial than of
study
at
home
for overall development of children. To commence with
,
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,
school education
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school, education
consists of
many positive points
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the many positive points
which can help children to be a responsible citizen.
Firstly
,
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,
teachers in
school
can help them not only in academic subjects but as well as exhort them to take part in extra
curriculam
of or relating to an academic course of study
curricular
activities. By which student can explore their hidden talent in different sectors
such
as art and sports.
Secondly
,
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,
in
school
they learn very
inportant
of great significance or value
important
skills like
coperation
joint operation or action
cooperation
co-operation
and
competion
a deep awareness of and sympathy for another's suffering
compassion
competence
competition
which are necessary virtue
to
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of
being a
successful
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success
in life.
Therfore
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Therefore
,
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,
school
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the school
is responsible for cultivating very important values for their
good
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better
future. With regard to parents, they nurture their kids with rigorous effort to make them to achieve everything in their life. Even though teaching at
home
is not very popular in our contemporary society
,
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,
irs
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
benefits cannot be overlooked.
First thing
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The first thing
is to consider parents are the only one who can understand
temperament
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the temperament
of their children and they provide them critical feedback time to time to make them decide wisely between right and wrong.
Moreover
, parents know very well
interst
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
of
ther
of them or themselves
their
the
other
children and they can develop
teir
of them or themselves
their
method of teaching
accordingly
and can make
boring subject
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a boring subject
boring subjects
in
intresting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
one.
Hence
, parents can teach their child for their
ovelall
involving only main features
overall
development. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe
study
at
school
makes our children more responsible,
discplined
obeying the rules
disciplined
, caring and respectful
.
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.
In addition
, they understand the importance and value of others by
studing
reading carefully with intent to remember
studying
with other children.
Furthermore
, in order to compete globally
,
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,
they need to
broden
make broader
broaden
their horizon which is possible only by
school
education. In conclusion
,
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,
while different people have different views,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think
home
study
cannot compete with the positives of
school
study
.

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