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Internet will replace written books. Do you agree or disagree?

#internet #books
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It will not be concealment of facts if I state the topic arrest my attention instantaneously because of its paramount importance in human life. A drastic change has been observed in public behaviour with books and, no doubt, steadily on the way. Its point black, the only engender for
this
 diversion is easily
availability
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available
 Internet actually winning the
raceontinuously
.People may have divergent
speculations but
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speculations, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will categorically opine
upcomming
of the relatively near future
upcoming
 years people will
found
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find
 more on their computers than in pages of
book
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the book
a book
books
.In
upcomming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
upcoming paragraphs
 we will discuss how and why it will happen.
Firslty
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Firstly
, we have seen life has become
more fast
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faster
 than a couple of
decade
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decades
 ago. Currently people are over the globe are in race to fulfil their
wordly
characteristic of or devoted to the temporal world as opposed to the spiritual world
worldly
 comforts by earning more and more money even they have disturbed their work-life balance
.
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.
 It
have been thought
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has been thought
 how to save your time to put in work for better outcomes.
Rest
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The rest
 of the world
prefferd
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prefers
prefer
 to online shopping rather to waste money not only for fuels to visit markets but
also
 their time. The same fashion is making dominancy in books
.
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.
 I can
soldify
make solid or more solid; cause to solidify
solidify
 my stance by citing the glaring example of university students are no more on schedule to read books in hard forms while soft form notes and books they have in pocket mobile through
internet 24 hours
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the internet 24 hours
.
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.
To be true,
This
 seems more suitable for pupils having no more problem
by
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with
 lifting books in books like
postman
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the postman
postmen
.
Secondly
,
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,
internet
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the internet
 offers
litrature
creative writing of recognized artistic value
literature
 from every field you wish free of cost just
on
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in
 one click
.
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.
 And
yes i
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yes, I
yes I
 can
furthur
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
gather
farther
strenghtify
 my statement that
its
it is
it's
 a
best
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good
 way to stave off your book racks packed and loaded with stuff you are not going to read again and again. On the reverse, it will be totally true that through
internet you
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the internet, you
the internet you
 have not as true relation with books as hard copy provides and it has been declared in recent
resaerch
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
 Almost 20% of eye patients from globe are
fallen
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falling
in
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into
disease
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the disease
 by screen readings.
Last
 but least,
slection
the act of choosing or selecting
selection
 of proper direction always leads
toward
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to
 success
.
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.
 The same is in our case
,
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,
 its better transformation with multiple
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
.
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.

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