Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Lately, it has become a contradictory issue that, some people think excessive money is
spending
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spent
on old buildings to look after and to reconstruct, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
think that, modern building can be introduce by demolishing the old ones. My firm conviction in its
favor
promote over another
favour
is that, it will be an optimistic solution if modern building can be introduced rather than the ancient ones. In
this
essay, I will support my
opine
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opinion
with examples It cannot be denied that, historical buildings are representing our traditional and cultural
identity but
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identity, but
we all so have to consider that people are no longer
interest
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interested
with
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in
the old building due to risk of accident.
First
of all, with the revolution of technology our modern
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
also
has changed than the previous time. People are no longer
interest
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interested
interesting
to visit these old buildings as most of them are ancient and there are no modern facilities
such
as, Air conditioned, electricity, Close-circuit camera, lift, and generator.
Moreover
, as most of the buildings are ancient building so they are all under alarming condition, anytime they can fall down and can cause of major accident. Particularly, those building stand beside the roads and they do not
sufficient
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sufficiently
suffice
security system.
Secondly
,
government
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the government
spent too much money to look after
this
historical building. There is
chance
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a chance
of corruptions. In
this
case, Bangladesh could be
salient example
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a salient example
salient examples
where government one thousand
dollar
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dollars
to reconstruct
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reconstruct
historical building but
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the historical building, but
the historical building but
instead
of repairing
this
building the museum authority took the money and gone away.
Moreover
, the expenses get double to reconstruct
these building
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these buildings
as they are backdated.
Furthermore
, some building can be
design
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designed
as it is by implementing some modern technology. There are,
however
, some people think it is our history is our identity and government should focus on it. If
this
historical building demolish
then
our identity might lose. Our younger generation will not be able to know their history. Countries cultural value may loss. To recapitulate, it can be said that, even though ancient building bear our
history but
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history, but
it
is
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also needs
also
need
to be consider
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to consider
the safety and security of people. It will be an optimistic solution, if modern building can be introduce rather knocking down the ancient ones. I suppose, it will encourage the tourist to visit modern building due to modern facilities. It
also
can play a vital role to improve
countries economy
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the country's economy
country's economy
.

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