Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Lately, it has become a contradictory issue that, some people think excessive money is
spending
on old buildings to look after and to reconstruct, while Suggestion
spent
other
think that, modern building can be introduce by demolishing the old ones.
My firm conviction in its plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
favor
is that, it will be an optimistic solution if modern building can be introduced rather than the ancient ones.
In promote over another
favour
this
essay, I will support my opine
with examples
It cannot be denied that, historical buildings are representing our traditional and cultural Suggestion
opinion
identity but
we all so have to consider that people are no longer Accept comma addition
identity, but
interest
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interested
with
the old building due to risk of accident.
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in
First
of all, with the revolution of technology our modern life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
also
has changed than the previous time. People are no longer interest
to visit these old buildings as most of them are ancient and there are no modern facilities Suggestion
interested
interesting
such
as, Air conditioned, electricity, Close-circuit camera, lift, and generator.
Moreover
, as most of the buildings are ancient building so they are all under alarming condition, anytime they can fall down and can cause of major accident. Particularly, those building stand beside the roads and they do not sufficient
security system.
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sufficiently
suffice
Secondly
, government
spent too much money to look after Suggestion
the government
this
historical building. There is chance
of corruptions. In Suggestion
a chance
this
case, Bangladesh could be salient example
where government one thousand Suggestion
a salient example
salient examples
dollar
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dollars
to reconstruct
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reconstruct
historical building but
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the historical building, but
the historical building but
instead
of repairing this
building the museum authority took the money and gone away. Moreover
, the expenses get double to reconstruct these building
as they are backdated. Suggestion
these buildings
Furthermore
, some building can be design
as it is by implementing some modern technology.
There are, Suggestion
designed
however
, some people think it is our history is our identity and government should focus on it. If this
historical building demolish then
our identity might lose. Our younger generation will not be able to know their history. Countries cultural value may loss.
To recapitulate, it can be said that, even though ancient building bear our history but
it Accept comma addition
history, but
is
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also needs
also
need to be consider
the safety and security of people. It will be an optimistic solution, if modern building can be introduce rather knocking down the ancient ones. I suppose, it will encourage the tourist to visit modern building due to modern facilities. It Suggestion
to consider
also
can play a vital role to improve countries economy
.Suggestion
the country's economy
country's economy
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