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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, it is easy to find cherries from the USA or oranges imported from Southern India in Vietnamese supermarkets due to
globalization
. Some people argue that countries are becoming more similar as the result of the abilities in worldwide trade is a positive change while others support the opposite. In my opinion,
globalization
 has both pros and cons. It promotes the
world
 economy, but it
also lead
Suggestion
also leads
 to the loss of local cultures.
First
 of all, the ability of trading goods around the
world
 provides opportunities for companies, especially international ones, to extend their market, which contributes to the development of the
world
 economy.
In addition
 to their domestic trade activities, companies can sell their products via the Internet,
for instance
, Amazon, or export overseas.
Moreover
, due to the policies supporting
globalization
, it is easier for international companies to invest in other countries markets. As an example, in Vietnam, you can find plenty of Korean cosmetic brand stores
such
 as The Face Shop, Innisfree, and so on in shopping malls.
However
,
globalization
 results in the loss of local cultures. When international corporations have access to the domestic market, it is more competitive for local companies or small trade to develop their activities because people are more attracted to novel international brand products.
Therefore
, these local traders may stop their activities with local goods, which leads to the loss of cultures.
For instance
, the opening of American fast-food brands
such
 as KFC, Burger King in Vietnam is a threat to Vietnamese restaurants. In conclusion, the development of
globalization
 positively impacts on the growth of the
world
 economy, but it might be a threat to local cultures. It is essential to enhance
globalization
 and support local products at the same time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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