IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

IT IS TRUE THAT
SURROUNDING
Correct article usage
THE SURROUNDING
show examples
 WEATHER HAS CHANGED A LOT
Correct your spelling
NOWADAYS
NOWADYAS
Punctuation problem
NOWADYAS,
show examples
THAT
Correct pronoun usage
WHICH
show examples
 AFFECTS THE ENVIRONMENT
BY
Change preposition
IN
show examples
ANY
Use the right word
MANY
show examples
MEANS
Check wording
WAYS
show examples
. CERTAIN IDEAS TO RESOLVE
THIS
Linking Words
 MENACE IS THE FOREIGN LEVEL MANAGEMENT. FIRST OF ALL,
THIS
Linking Words
 ESSAY WOULD
100
Correct your spelling
100%
 DISAGREE WITH THE ABOVE NOTION
DUE TO
Linking Words
 THE MAJOR REASON THAT WILL BE DISCUSSED BELOW AND
SECONDLY
Linking Words
, SUGGEST THE PRIMARY ALTERNATIVE TO PROTECT THE SURROUNDING
AT
Check wording
AREA AT
show examples
 ARE BEST. WHEN IT COMES TO THE
WHETHER
Use the right word
WEATHER
show examples
 CHANGES, THE PROBLEM HAS
PSREAD
Correct your spelling
SPREAD
 ALL AROUND THE GLOBE THAT HAS
DECLINE
Wrong verb form
DECLINED
show examples
 THE CHANCES OF OBTAINING AIDS FROM ANOTHER
TERRITORIES
Fix the agreement mistake
TERRITORY
show examples
 AS THEY ARE
AE
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
ALSO
Linking Words
 FACING THE SAME SITUATION.
HENCE
Linking Words
, I BELIEVE, IT IS NOT A GOOD IDEA TO GET
A
Correct article usage
AN
show examples
 ASSET
FRON
Use the right word
FROM
show examples
 THEM.
FOR EXAMPLE
Linking Words
,
A MUCH
Correct word choice
a
show examples
RENOUNED NATION
Correct your spelling
much-renowned nation
THE
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
USE HAS
Use the right word
has
show examples
 50% OF THE ISSUES
IN
Change preposition
apply
show examples
COMAPRED TO DEVELOPING COUNTRIES,
EVEN
Correct word choice
even though
show examples
 THEY HAVE THE LATEST INNOVATIVE INSTRUMENTS OR TOOLS. SO, AS PER MY VIEW, PROVIDING INFORMATION TO THE PUBLIC ABOUT THE CONSEQUENCES OF SURGING THE ENVIRONMENTAL PROBLEM COULD ABLE TO HELP TO GET RID OF
THIS
Linking Words
 DETRIMENTAL CONDITION OF THE
PLANATE
Use the right word
PLANET
show examples
.
FOR INSTANCE
Linking Words
, AS PER THE UK
WHETHER DATA
Check wording
weather data
show examples
, THERE HAS BEEN
40
Correct article usage
a 40
show examples
% DECREASE IN THE SPREADING
THE TRASH
Use the right word
of trash that
show examples
THAT IS
Linking Words
AAFTECTING THE
Correct your spelling
affecting the
SURROUNDING AND
Use the right word
surroundings and
show examples
WEATHER
Correct article usage
the weather
show examples
OWING
Punctuation problem
, OWING
show examples
 TO THE FACT THAT
THE
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
UK CIVILIANS
HAS
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
show examples
 A ENOUGH KNOWLEDGE AND UNDERSTANDING OF THE TAKING CARE OF THEIR ENVIRONMENT. IN CONCLUSION, SURROUNDING MENACE INDEED SOLVE IF WE ALL WORK
TIGAETHER
Correct your spelling
TOGETHER
 AS A TEAM. PERHAPS,
THIS
Linking Words
 ACTION REQUIRES THE MAIN SUPPORT FROM THE REGIME TO
SOREAD
Correct your spelling
SOAR
 THE AWARENESS AROUND THE CIVILIANS.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your position on the topic. Try to rephrase the question and give a clear opinion.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows logically from one to the next. Use connecting words to guide the reader.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples and details to support your points, as this will make your argument stronger.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion that you disagree with the idea, which is good for task response.
task achievement
The suggestion for raising awareness is a positive point that adds depth to your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: