Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

An increasing number of people meet and talk to their friends online
instead
of in person. In my opinion,
this
is a negative development which
can
Suggestion
Can
lead to isolation, potentially harmful situations and
also
problems later on in life. One serious problem that can arise from people socialising online is that it can lead to isolation. Before the internet, people would frequently go out
to
Suggestion
To
meet friends, for examples in cafe, bars or restaurants, whereas now people prefer to stay at home alone, chatting online.
As a result
, people are starting to spend the majority of their time alone at home in their room without meeting others.
Isolation
Suggestion
The isolation
of
this
kind is not healthy and can sometime lead to depression and other issues. Another issue is that meeting people online can be risky.
In other words
, people can assume fake identities online as well as hide their true characteristics.
This
is particularly concerning for teenagers who are impressionable and can easily be led into dangerous situations.
Furthermore
, as
this
interaction is
online
Suggestion
Online
parents have no way of monitoring it and protecting their children.
Finally
, socialising online can end in difficulties years later as conversations and shared photos that had been forgotten reappear.
This
situation is currently
critical
Suggestion
Critical
for many people, again especially for teenagers who do not think carefully before posting online.
That is
to say information which is put online can remain there forever and while people may share intimate communications with close friends, these words can resurface later on leading to much embarrassment. In conclusion,
although
it has become more popular for people to socialise through the internet, it has brought about too many problems for
this
to be considered
a
Suggestion
A
positive trend.

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