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University should accept an equal number of male and female students in every subject agree or disagree.

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 agree that there would be no gender discrimination, but in
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 context, it would be unfair University the same number of male and female I disagree with the given statement completely for some reasons my position will be declared
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 in the upcoming paragraphs. Having an equal figure of sexes in the city University is somehow a hypothetical think as to sing a field is a matter of interest for every student.
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 instance, and a sum of masculines are not passionate about a particular subject and it leads to plenty of empty seats in the University.
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, these seats go waste,
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 of which university may not get a specific amount of money to their Institute.
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 which I want to mention is that talent may lag in the race. By
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, I mean that if more than 50% of men or female are deserving of those seats, which are fulfilling up by the same statistic of sexes that it may result in deficiency of talented people a good example for
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 is as It has been seen that a large majority of individuals who are interested math field is made from that perspective providing equality in admission for the same gender it's is not a good step. At
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, I want to conclude that before imposing any plan we should think about it fabrication like in given argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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