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1. Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people, who lost their jobs because of it.

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Online shopping has become common all around the world where there is access to the internet. Proponents of online sales claim it has more
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 influence, yet
adverse impact
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the adverse impact
 of online trading on
nature
 and employment
can not
can not
cannot
 be ignored.
This
 essay will scrutinize
both
 positive and negative
effect
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effects
 of shopping on the internet. On the one hand, online shopping offers
wide range
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a wide range
 of opportunities and influences on the
nature
 and workforce positively.
First
 of all, customers do not need to commute to department stores using vehicles which will emit greenhouse gases to the atmosphere leading to global warming.
Secondly
, some people have started their online businesses selling products without going out of their houses and most people are recruited in sorting and distributing of the online orders.
Thus
, we can see
online trade
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an online trade
 has
favorable impact
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a favourable impact
favourable impact
both
 the environment and employment of some entrepreneurs who are engaged in online commerce.
On the other hand
, negative aspects of online shopping cannot be
overlooked especially
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overlooked, especially
 in
nature
 deterioration and unemployment. People now can order items and products from any part of the world on the internet and
this
 will accelerate the rate of air pollution which is already at alarming level.
Moreover
, a lot of employees in the sector of selling have been dismissed from their jobs as fewer numbers of people and robots can do their duties properly. That’s why, purchasing
on
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of
 the commercial websites has
unfavorable effect
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an unfavourable effect
unfavourable effect
both
 on the
nature
 and the provision of job. To conclude, online shopping has
both
 beneficial and detrimental
effect
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effects
 on
environment
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the environment
 and employment of people.

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