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In many countries in the world people buy clothes and choose hair styles according to latest fashion. Why is this happening ? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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People nowadays are very interested to check the new styles and the latest fashion models to follow. Because it's very important in our generation to follow what is Going on else we will be strange for the others. What is happening now it all because of the social media which really affect the peoples minds especially when we talk about clothes. From my point of the current situation, it's disappointing because we should have to focus on more important things
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 as education etc.
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 the life example about the current situation is the marketing from the sport stars and singers for famous brands.
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