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People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming communities. What are the possible cause and solutions?

#people #neighbours #communities
The
first
 map illustrates how Stokeford looked in 1930, while the
second
 map shows its appearance in 2010. The
city
 has undergone major changes and much of the farmland has been replaced by houses. The
city
 is located on the eastern bank of river stoke. The bridge connecting the
city
 to the western bank of the river is still there. In 1930, the
city
 had a single
road
 connecting the southern end of the
city
 to the bridge and a few houses
were situated
Suggestion
was situated
 adjacent to the
road
 on the northern side, whereas in 2010, new branching roads were laid to provide connectivity to the new housing. The post
office which
Accept comma addition
office, which
 was present on the
western
Suggestion
west
 side of
road
Suggestion
the road
 was not modified.
Also
 the primary school was extended with two other new blocks and shops adjacent to the post office were removed for laying a new
road
. Farmlands lying in the southern and north-eastern ends occupied a major portion of the village in 1930, while in 2010 they were replaced by houses. The
garden’s
Suggestion
garden
 area is reduced to half over the time to
accomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
 more houses and a large house in the garden was modified to a retirement house.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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