I want my writing task 2 score. here is my writing:

Even in our modern

society one

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society, one

cannnot

can not

cannot

deny that

luck

sometimes has been considered in relation to

success

. But many people are of the belief that

success

is the

prize which

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prize, which

only

hardworkers

makes things out of wood

woodworkers

hard workers

may achieve it in their life. I agree with the

later

referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)

latter

idea.

First

of all, in my perspective working harder may increase the chance of

success

. As a matter of fact it works as a lottery machine which can

prints

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print

lots of chance cards for a person and makes him a winner.

For

instance those

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instance, those

who works later than

usuall

occurring or encountered or experienced or observed frequently or in accordance with regular practice or procedure

usual

employees (10-12 hours a day) will have double chance cards than the ones who leave work earlier (6 hours a day). The proportions of reaching a goal are much higher when you try different routes to it. Working harder

this

way is rather more related to

success

than

wildering

migratory

wandering

wondering

around searching for

luck

.

to

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To

bring you fortune.

secondly

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Secondly

, the term

success

in my believe is not about the short term goals like money and

instead

about the long term ones which are building an

infrustructure

the basic structure or features of a system or organization

infrastructure

in our life. Something that can't be demolished easily. Fore example a successful businessman like an

enterpreneour

someone who organizes a business venture and assumes the risk for it

entrepreneur

interpreter

isn't the rich

one but

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one, but

the one who can gather himself up after each failure. A hardworking characteristic always makes his efforts till he or she achieve what is needed while the

luckyone

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lucky one

don't understand the value of his mistakes and may breakdown behind an easy obstacle in his career and lose what he achieved by

luck

. In conclusion working hard has an

unbounding

incapable of adapting or changing to meet circumstances

unbending

unbinding

unending

relationship with the correct meaning of

success

. The more we go deeper the less we found

luck

relating to it.