The mass media ,including television ,radio and newspaper have great influence in shaping people's idea. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Mass
media
is
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are
essential part
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an essential part
our life.
presently
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Presently
,
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,
every family
have
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has
own
television
or radio
therefore
people mostly
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people, mostly
spent their time too much on watching and reading with whom they can gain various type knowledge
.
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.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
,
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,
they can know about what occur surrounding in the world.
obviously
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Obviously
I agree that the
mass
media massive influence on individual positive as well as negative. To embark with there are few good effect
for
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in
shaping
people
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peoples'
person's
peoples
idea through
mass
media.
firstly
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Firstly
the
television
or newspaper have changed cognitive pattern with advancement of technology.
it
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It
is cheaper and
convient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
way of entertainment for people.
secondly
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Secondly
,
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,
people can eliminate their stress through watching
television
with whom they can feel
relax
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relaxed
and gland.
moreover they
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Moreover, they
Moreover they
can know about
others countary culture
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the others country, culture
the others country culture
others country culture
others counter culture
,
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,
lifestyle
,
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,
religion
excetra
more than is needed, desired, or required
extra
extras
excite
through
mass
media in their home
.
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.
Moving
further
we do not
overshedow
be greater in significance than
overshadow
demerits of
mass
media.
when
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When
people are watching
movie
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a movie
movies
the movie
on
television meanwhile
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television, meanwhile
advertisement are
interpret
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interpreted
in movies
this
reason many
are feel
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have felt
furious and boring due to advertisement.
apart
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Apart
from that if people prefer
watch
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watching
television
for many
hour
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hours
in daily
routine
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routine, then
then
they can become lazy and they do not concentrate on their work. To
recapitulate I
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recapitulate, I
think
mass
media has more merits than demerits because their life become dull and boring without
mass
media
.
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.
recidivism
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Recidivism
mass
media
is
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are
vital source
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a vital source
for information.

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