The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
These maps depict the infrastructure improvement that allows easier entry to the city hospital in 2010 as compared to 2007.
To begin
with, it is clear that
the main layout of the hospital approach was unchanged.
However
, on the south
there was a city lane. Add a comma
,south
Further
this
route, on the right side there was a hospital way. Moreover
, the car parking for staff and the public was the
opposite direction of the bus stops, which Change preposition
in the
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
the
both ways of the hospital street. Remove the article
apply
Besides
this
, city
hospital was in the centre of Correct article usage
the city
ring
highway.
Correct article usage
the ring
On the other hand
, by 2010, the originally shared car park only allowed staff to plaza cars there, while
a public car place was established to the east of the hospital and this
is the new
constructed area. Replace the word
newly
Furthermore
, now there are two roundabouts was built which is
linked to the ring line and town highway. Not only Correct subject-verb agreement
are
bus
station, but Correct article usage
the bus
also
staff parking has reconstructed
.
Add a missing verb
been reconstructed
Overall
, the construction of new
era is more beneficial for the public rather Correct article usage
a new
then
previous one.Correct your spelling
the
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