The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
These maps depict the infrastructure improvement that allows easier entry to the city hospital in 2010 as compared to 2007.
To begin
with,
it is clear that
the main layout of the hospital approach was unchanged.
However
, on the
south
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there was a city lane.
Further
this
route, on the right side there was a hospital way.
Moreover
, the car parking for staff and the public was
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opposite direction of the bus stops, which
was
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both ways of the hospital street.
Besides
this
,
city
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hospital was in the centre of
ring
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highway.
On the other hand
, by 2010, the originally shared car park only allowed staff to plaza cars there,
while
a public car place was established to the east of the hospital and
this
is the
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constructed area.
Furthermore
, now there are two roundabouts was built which
is
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linked to the ring line and town highway. Not only
bus
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station, but
also
staff parking has
reconstructed
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.
Overall
, the construction of
new
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era is more beneficial for the public rather
then
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previous one.

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