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Some people think that only staff who worked in a company for a long time should be promoted to a higher position. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Promotion from work plays a crucial role in
everyone
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's life. It is a debatable issue that only employee who are already working in a working area for
last
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 decade should get promoted to higher positions or other should get a
chance
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 to get promoted.
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, I disagree with
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 statement that the only old staff member should be promoted. No doubt, the
first
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 of these is that these more experienced employees would be able to adapt themselves to be in a higher
position
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. As they would understand the culture and policies of the
company
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 better, they should be given priority to be in higher positions in a
company
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. But the people who have equal knowledge regarding higher
position
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 have
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 right to apply for higher positions and should get a
chance
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 to get promoted.
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, higher
position
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 is a way to work hard regarding getting a
chance
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 to get rewarded for higher stand. If
everyone
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 gets a
chance
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 to promote for higher level job in a
company
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,
everyone
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 tries their best to get higher
position
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.
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, it is generally seen in MNC companies, that to increase their
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everyone
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 do their best. Apart from
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, lower level employees
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 give their best for getting higher
position
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. Overall, though older person who are already working for a long time in a
company
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 should get promoted, but the people who are doing better for getting a higher level in a
company
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 should
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 deserve a promotion.

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