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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.
#electricity #power #station
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This
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 particular diagram eventually describes how the
electricity
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 is generated by
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water
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the water
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flow
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 of
river
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the river
a river
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 and where it
get
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 stored. At the very first sight, the
water
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, which comes from the river is stored in a high-level
reservoir
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. There is a part of the machine which is called Dam and it remains open
in
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during
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day
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the day
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,
closed
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and closed
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 at night. When the dam is open, the
flow
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 of
water
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 to generate
electricity
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 passes by a big pipe which is directly connected to the
power
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 station. Specifically, the pipe connects with a generator. Later on, the
water
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flow
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 starts generating
electricity
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 in
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power
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a power
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 station.
Electricity
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 which is generated by the
water
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flow
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 is stored in
national
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the national
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 grid through the
power
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 lines.
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,
in
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at
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the
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apply
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night, the
water
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 flows from the low-level
reservoir
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. Reversible turbines
pumps
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pump
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water
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 into
high-level
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the high-level
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reservoir
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. Meanwhile, the
water
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flow
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 from the High-level
reservoir
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remains
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stop
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stopped
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, as it only flows during the day time. To sum it up,
this
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 is the
overall
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 mechanism of the hydroelectric
power
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 station which predominantly works for
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electricity
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the electricity
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 generation process
in
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during
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day
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the day
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 and stays busy
to pump
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pumping
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water
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 at night.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water, flow, reservoir, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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