Do you feel it is better for young people leaving school to study further at university or go straight into the workplace? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

I believe that there are various aspects
for
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of
to
this
situation and according to me there is no need for
the young
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the younger
generation to go to the school and finish the
bachelors
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Bachelors
and will have a bright future. In the
next
paragraph, I will add the reasons why I think
this
way.
College degree
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A college degree
The college degree
is not significant to be successful in the modern era. Most of the successful entrepreneurs in the world
doesntdoesn’t hold
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didn’t hold
did not hold
do not hold
don’t hold
will not hold
won’t hold
college degree
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college degrees
a college degree
. For
instance
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Instance
, Mark ZukerburgZuckerberg, founder and CEO of the Facebook
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Inc Inc
. Had is
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dropping
out from of HarwardHarvard University but recently,
Harvard Hardward University
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The Harvard Hardward University
awarded him with the
dDegree
a position on a scale of intensity or amount or quality
degree
.
Likewise
, modern
technological
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technology
and
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a computer network consisting of a worldwide network of computer networks that use the TCP/IP network protocols to facilitate data transmission and exchange
internet
revolution changed the definition of success and
proved
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that
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a college degree
cCollege degree
college degree
college dDegree
is not necessary.
On the other hand
, some people argue that the children won't learn anything without going to the college. But,
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there
their
are
lot
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lots
of kids who gained
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at Home from their own parents much more than what they have learnt in ScoolSchool or college.
For example
, Akash Vihari, a small 5
year kid
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A year kid
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from Los AnglelesAngeles reached came
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in
the final round of National Spelling Bee
competetioncompetition
. By that time he just started going to
school
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School
but he got
this
knowledge from his
pParents
a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian
parents
parent
patients
. Most of the Spelling Bee
competetion'scompetitions’
top kids are less than 10 years old and
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Goinedgained
knowldgeknowledge
by using
Internet
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the Internet
or from their own parents. With
this
argument, I conclude that
dDegree
a position on a scale of intensity or amount or quality
degree
is just a piece of paper to get some paid
jobs but
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jobs, but
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he/she will get the degree from top most UnivbersitiesUniversities.

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