Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

In the modern scenario, most of the workforce in a country
that the value of engaging in exercises in living a healthy life is negligible.
, they tend to cling on to the
gossip (usually a mixture of truth and untruth) passed around by word of mouth
which suggest, alterations in diet
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adding supplements or multivitamins) have the sole power in addressing their health problems
as obesity. In
essay I am going to discuss the negative consequences of neglecting exercises and how to overcome them. On the one hand, nowadays technology
has crucially affected
crucially affects
crucially affected
the essential human mobility or locomotion. For an instance, almost all the companies have replaced staircases with elevators or escalators which is an easy mode of travelling to any floor of the building rather than ascending a flight of stairs!
Furthermore not
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Furthermore, not
like in the past people are reluctant to go even to the nearest boutique on foot.
On the other hand
, today’s workers pay much attention to their work rather
than to their health
than their health
. The deadlines and schedules make them work
selflessly which
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selflessly, which
them with no time to engage in exercises.
However if
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However, if
the government as well as all the companies in a country
together and provide the staff members a few hours off of work, at least for a week to engage in exercises and appreciate them when they intend to do so will have a positive impact on these problems. The companies can
notify the workers about the aftermath of not getting proper exercises via
the internet
or brochures on a daily basis, they will undoubtedly start acting towards gaining good health through exercises. In conclusion, there are many reasons as
stated above which express why the working people do not engage in exercises nowadays. If the government and private companies collaborate to come up with innovative ideas which will earn people’s trust about the major role that the exercises play in a healthy life,
can surely be controlled in the future.

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