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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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Nowadays, machines are being used to do most of our chores at home;
on the
contrary to
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contrary, to
 the past, whereby everything was done manually. Whether
this
 development bears more merits or demerits is debatable, as we will discuss now. It must be admitted that humans have benefited a lot by using machines, which are
pracitcally
almost; nearly
practically
 doing most of the housework. Foremost among these
benefits perhaps
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benefits, perhaps
 is time-saving.
In other words
, the advent of home appliances
such
 as dishwashers, washing machines and vacuum cleaners has allowed the majority of housework to be done in a short amount of time.
For instance
, homeowners can use those machines simultaneously to finish many tasks at the same time, allowing them to use the rest of the day dealing with more pressing matters
such
 as work.
Besides
 time-saving, these machines complete the tasks more efficiently than humans can by using their hands.
However
, the dependence on using machines at home does have some disadvantages.
For example
, if one of the devices stopped working due to a malfunction, that would put the task on hold until the machine is fixed, which is a stressful situation, because of the
owner
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owner's
 inability to do the task by hand.
In addition
 to that, since most of the housework is taken care of by the appliances, people become lazier. According to a study at the University of California, people in the past
are
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were
 healthier than people nowadays, and the reason is that they used to physically do their house chores.
Consequently
, the more people become dependent on machines, the lazier they get. In conclusion,
although
 relying on machines can make people helpless when they stop, and physically unhealthy, the advantages of them saving time and finishing work efficiently is more beneficial.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Manual labor
  • Displacement
  • Homemaking skills
  • Technological advancements
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Resource depletion
  • Energy efficiency
  • Social dynamics
  • Operational understanding
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