You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. <img src="--DELETED LINK-- alt="IELTS Writing Task 1"/>

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph shows pollution
levels
in London between 1600 and 2000. It measures
smoke
and
sulphur
dioxide
in
micrograms
per cubic metre.
According to
the information, the
levels
of both pollutants formed a similar pattern during
this
period, but there were always higher
levels
of
sulphur
dioxide
than
smoke
in the atmosphere. (2nd paragraph describes the trends in more detail and illustrates these using data from the graph.) In 1600, pollution
levels
were low, but over the
next
hundred years, the
levels
of
sulphur
dioxide
rose to 700
micrograms
per cubic metre,
while
the
levels
of
smoke
rose gradually to about 200
micrograms
per cubic metre. Over the
next
two hundred years the
levels
of
sulphur
dioxide
continued to increase,
although
there was some fluctuation in
this
trend. They reached a peak in 1850.
Smoke
levels
increased a little more sharply during
this
time and peaked in 1900 at about 500
micrograms
. During the 20th century, the
levels
of both pollutants fell dramatically, though there was a great deal of fluctuation within
this
fall. (Final paragraph draws a simple conclusion from the data.)
Clearly
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air pollution was a bigger problem in London in the early 20th century than it is now. (176 words)

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words levels, smoke, sulphur, dioxide, micrograms with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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