The increasing amount of violence that is shown regularly in films has been a cause of concern for some time. Such films make violence appear entertaining, exciting and even something to be copied. However, it seems to be increasingly clear that this development is causing problems in our society.

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He increasing amount of
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shown regularly in films has been a cause of concern for some time.
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films make
violence
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appear entertaining, exciting and even something to be copied.
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, it seems to be increasingly clear that
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development is causing problems in our society.
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of all, those who enjoy
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films eventually stop associating the
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with any real consequences. They
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lose their sense of reality and no longer take
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seriously or have any sympathy with the victims.
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is bad for both individuals and for our whole society. Another worrying trend is that in these films the heroes are shown as people to be admired, even though they are very violent characters.
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leads impressionable people to believe that they can gain respect and admiration by copying
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aggressive behaviour, and so the levels of
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increase, especially in major cities throughout the world. What is needed to combat these problems is definite action. The government should regulate the film industry on the one hand, and provide better education on the other. Producers must be prevented from showing meaningless
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as 'fun' in their films.
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, films could emphasise the tragic consequences of violent acts and
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would educate people, especially young people, to realise that
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is real. To conclude, I think that viewing
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as entertainment may indeed cause serious social problems and that the only way to improve
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situation is by regulating the industry and educating the public about the real human suffering that
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violence
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brings.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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