We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? In this dependence on computers a good thing or should be more suspicious of their benefits?

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In the
technologycal
based in scientific and industrial progress
technological
technologically
era that we are living, computers are used for
serveral
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
purposes
such
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as business,
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healthty
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
, antecedents
policial
a plan of action adopted by an individual or social group
policies
and maps.
This
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reality has made a life more easy,
nevertheless
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in my view I think we are becoming
addict
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addicted
to
this
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electronic device, which is even more important than the human work. If we start to
depende
be contingent upon (something that is elided)
depend
totally from computers, perhaps our privacy will not exist, due to nowadays is very easy to get information about one person, for the reason that almost personal data
is
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are
in
cloud
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a cloud
the cloud
. Actually, there are a lot of
hacker
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hackers
who are very smart with the stole of information. So, in my
opnion thanks
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opinion, thanks
opinion thanks
to computers today there is not privacy.
On the other hand
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, I think that computers could
made
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make
that a lot of people lose their jobs, since for the companies will be more cheaper have
this
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electronic device than workers.
For instance
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, every time in a
newspaper it’s
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newspaper, it’s
necessary have less journalists, because a computer can write itself a news. To conclude, I believe that we
can not
can not
cannot
stop the dependent on computers, in
fact almost
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fact, almost
every day we can see a new innovation in
this
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area, the big companies as a Microsoft and Apple are competing for who is the better in
this
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campus. Actually, today a
cellphone
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cell phone
can be considered a computer too, thanks the born of
Iphone
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the iPhone
iPhone
IPhone
.
However
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,
for give
stop blaming or grant forgiveness
forgive
a solution in
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topic I
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topic, I
think that the should exist more education about the care of data.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Smart traffic management
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • Machine learning
  • Personalized treatment
  • Virtual classrooms
  • AI tutors
  • Smart homes
  • Energy consumption
  • Grocery shopping automation
  • Data analysis
  • Decision-making assistance
  • Efficiency
  • Mainstream adoption
  • Predictive algorithms
  • Personalization
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