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The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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News media and publications have made a huge impact on our day to day lives. Some say digital and printed media are shifting our attention more towards
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 as tragedies, crisis situations and that
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 can have a negative impact on citizens. I completely disagree with
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 argument, as I believe that
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 incidents must be highlighted to attract attention and for various other reasons.
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, headlines on media related to crisis situations can provide consumers a chance to better prepare.
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, incidents and
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 as terrorist attacks or natural disasters yet to happen and even medical emergencies would give the readers an opportunity to prepare in advance for the worse.
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, the latest medical situation in China is now a worldwide pandemic according to World Health Organisation.
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, developing stories
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 as, presence of the Corona Virus in a particular country, how fast it is spreading and instructions on how we can survive must be given a higher priority than news
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 as, USA signing a peace deal with the Taliban.
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, critics who are in favour of positive stories being in the headlines say that
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 negative news could trigger a shock or sadness and even make readers emotional. I completely agree with
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, in my opinion credible news is far better than being misinformed. To put differently, with the technological advancement people are now heavily reliant on the internet,
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, reading a blog that some stranger has written where it's authenticity is questionable or a neighbour gossiping misinformation to another would be much worse than seeing shocking news on the front page of a newspaper. In conclusion,
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 related to a crisis or tragedies would provide better public awareness and allow readers to better prepare for pandemics
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 as the Corona Virus.
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, focusing more on these negative stories on the media would make the readers emotional or sad. It,
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, provide credible
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 than misinformation from reading gossip.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news reports
  • media focus
  • negative news
  • positive developments
  • stress and anxiety
  • skewed perception of reality
  • world view
  • desensitization
  • pessimistic outlook
  • general public
  • mental well-being
  • proactive problem-solving
  • holistic view
  • informed decision-making
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